IELTS Task 1 Bar Graph: Global Sales of the Top Five Mobile Phone

Kemarin saya sudah membagikan contoh paragraf yang menggunakan komparasi YEARS dan GAPS.

Sharing kali, saya menunjukkan bagaimana Language of Change dan Language of Comparison digunakan bersama dalam paragraf. Perhatikan contoh berikut: 

In 2009, Nokia sold close to 450 million mobile phone, which was almost double the number of handsets sold by the second most successful manufacturer, Samsung. Over the following four years, however, Nokia’s sales figures fell by approximately 200 million units, whereas Samsung saw sales rise by a similar amount. By 2013, Samsung had become the market leader with sales reaching 450 million units.

The other three top selling mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013 were LG, ZTE, and Apple. In 2009, these companies sold around 125 million, 50 million and 25 million mobile handsets respectively, but Apple overtook the other two vendors in 2011. In 2013, purchases of Apple handsets reached 150 million units, while LG saw declining sales and the figures for ZTE rose only slightly

Beberapa vocabulary Band 7:
- Sold Worldwide

- Sales figures, purchases

- Most popular, best selling brand, top selling

- Second most successful manutafcturer

- Market leader

- Mobiles phones, handsets, units

- Brands, manufactures, companies, vendors

- Saw the biggest rises, saw declining sales

- Close to, almost, approximately, around

- Double the number

- Rise by a similar amount

- Respectively

Note:
MERAH menggunakan Language of Comparison

BIRU menggunakan Language of Changes

PENTING: Jika kamu ingin mendapatkan skor 7+, selalu menggunkan Language of Comparison and Changes.

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Contoh paragraf komparasi GAPS and YEARS di LINE GRAPH

Sharing kali ini tentang contoh paragraph yang menggunakan teknik komparasi YEARS dan GAPS yang sering ditemukan di LINE GRAPH. Berikut Line Graph yang akan dibuatkan paragrafnya

The Graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 

Graduate numbers rose during the 15 years and reached their highest levels in 2007, but there were always more females than male graduates. In 1992, the difference was less marked, with just over 70,000 males and about 100,000 females. However, by 2007 there had been more significant growth on female numbers. That year, they rose to 147,000, compared to just 95,000 males. Thus the gap between the number of male and female graduates had widened. 

A more detailed look at the graph reveals that the overall growth in numbers was not always steady. Between 1992 and 1995, there was a slight increase. That was followed by a period of about five years, when numbers fell, then flattened out at just over 70,000 for men and 100,000 for women. After 2000, however, graduate numbers saw their strongest growth rate, and this was well above the increases that had been seen in the early 1990s. 

Note: 

Paragraf 1 tentang GAPS, menggunakan Language of Comparison

Paragraf 2 tentang YEARS, menggunakan Language of Changes

PENTING: Jika kamu ingin mendapatkan skor 7+, susun paragraf komparasi berdasarakan GAPS and YEARS 

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Contoh paragraf esai IELTS Line Graph Band 7

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Di sana banyak merasa sudah menuliskan paragraf yang tepat, tapi pada kenyataaannya, paragraf yang tersusun itu TIDAK dapat mewakili kesimpulan dari graph di atas.

Permasalahan paling banyak saya temukan adalah, Peserta kelas IELTS online ini TIDAK memahami secara utuh informasi yang disampaikan.

Contohnya, The highest amount of water was seen and increased significantly from the first to the last year.

Di atas adalah contoh yang keliru dalam menuliskan kalimat untuk mendeskripsikan kalimat di atas.

Perhatikan contoh paragraf di bawah ini:

Roadways were the main source of transportation in the UK, which transported around 70 million tonnes of goods in 1974. The amount of transported goods hovered around 80 million tonnes till around 1996 from where it increased at a steady rate before closing at just under 100 million tonnes in 2002. Pipelines, in contrast, were the lowest in 1974 at around 3 million tonnes after increasing at a steady rate closed down at just over 20 million tonnes in 2002.

Railway and Waterways recorded to be transporting approximately 40 million tonnes in 1974, from where waterways showed a rise in transported goods till 1992 before declining by around 10 million tonnes for the following three years, it again rose and closed at about 62 million tonnes in 2002. Railways fluctuated between 20 million tonnes and 40 million tonnes and closed at just above 40 million tonnes.

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